After reading the feedback, I saw there were actually only three issues. My thesis statement wasnt as clear as it should have been. It lacked supplementing my own information. Little errors in my sentence construction. The first issue was not surprising; I never seem to get my thesis statements right. Its either too long, or too short, or not clear. I was shocked to find out it lacked my analysis because I keep count of my citations. There should have been 6 or 7 citations in my 7-page paper, not counting the cover and the references page. I think that is an expectable amount of quotes, most of the paper is based on my idea of the new business module for new Dunkin locations. The last issue was not surprising as well, I do proof-read, I make sure my husband reads it as...