Evaluation

Student:

Theresa Conley Assignment:

ENG 121 Wk 2 Draft Narrative Essay

Instructor:

Sajru Dueber

Date:

4/17/2009

(Hi, Theresa! You have a great voice, and you have a pretty good handle on your writing. You do need to work on punctuation consistency, but it is apparent that you know the rules. There are two noticeable things about your draft that need work. One, you need a thesis. And it seems like you should be able to come up with one pretty easily. Be sure, once you select a thesis/topic that you reevaluate all your information. A good way to approach what should and shouldn't belong in your paper is to remember how interdependent everything is: Every word should be a necessity to the sentence; and, every sentence should support, and progress, the topic...